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Love is lusting
   Love is trusting
      Love is thrusting.

Minus two
   if you do-
But know
   that Sex
is a vex;
    A curse
for the worse.

A voice
   without choice.

Indeed,
   to lope
     and cope.

Pulling the pieces
    Through nephews and nieces.

Making mingle
   be single.

Singular-
   Like the word unheard.

But those
who speak
   are weak.

Just fuck
  and with luck -
The Sun
  will shine
      Devine.  

But those who care
   will spare;
Those who live
   will give.

But what is life
   without Sex?

A goddamn vex.
This poem, or whatever it may be; doesn't live up to any conventional standards. Of course, not that it was written in that context. It just sort of appeared after awhile. It's far from good - it merely focuses on a small debate against a large subject.

The size of the argument is meaningless, seeing as so many fall for the act of sex. They see it as the most exciting part of their life. Why love someone for their qualities? When you can love them for their sexual indentations. People don't think about what each other are feeling. They are fixated on putting their keys into someone else's creation.

The poem may seem at first, to be in the act of sex; but it's a sarcastic tone.

In a sense, saying that, a life without sex would be useless.

Aye, there are also curse words in here; not for fun either, to fit the context. The vulgarity in which our society finds sexual interactions so appealing. Fucking and thrusting. It's what they want right? It's what gets them going.

They miss the important pieces. They go straight for the act.

Like loving a cat; not for it's appeal of warmth. But loving it for the bones and blood.

There is more to the action then what people see.

To think of a heavenly act, so downgraded by society; that now it's disgusting. Not appealing.
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tigerwol Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Student
I'm so confused
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Mister-Skank Featured By Owner Edited Nov 1, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very good.
I recognize the short line rhyme, a form I enjoy.
Here's one I did years and years ago—I just call it "Rhyme."
The old-fashioned language is deliberate, an exorcism I needed.

Trapped in his immoral life

He betrayed his loving wife

Hurting her he hurt their kids

Their daughter, their son

Lost in lies, sickening whys

Wrenching cries, helpless sighs

Undisguised by philosophy

He denied

 

Sorry?

Worry?

 

His wounded soul

Unwhole, adjusted

Cynical, he sinned again

Openly lusted

He cheated, repeatedly

He treated his wife like dirt

He laughed if she hurt

Party clown, professor

He professed, “Friends.”

He aimed his life towards them

His life controlled his wife

 

Sex was how it all began

Little did he understand

Fourteen masturbated

Fifteen kissed

Sixteen sex

Seventeen “missed”

Eighteen pregnant teen

Marriage, “had to”

A girl, a boy

Sister, brother, mother

Loved him, trusted

He hid, haunted, hunted, lusted

Drank, flirted, fornicated

Adulterer, liar

Lie-encrusted

Came home drunk

Untorn, unsated

Unsad, glad to

Stinking, Mr. Skank

 

Dark night

Bright tiny dream light

Moon white

Buddhists entered in

He confessed, he vowed reform

“No more sin!”

He prayed, he bowed

He practiced, he tried

He wanted to conform

He loved his wife, her warm

He loved their kids, their fun

He wanted to be good

Why couldn’t he do

What he knew he should?

 

Marriage, children, broken home

Divorce, dead horse, ruined carriage

Tragic poem


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dogllover111602 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
A girl asked a guy if he thought she was pretty and
he
said no. She asked him if he would want to be with her forever and
he
said no. She then asked him if she were to leave would he cry, and
............once
again he replied with a no. She had heard enough. As she walked... See Moreaway, tears streaming down her f......ace the...
... See Moreboy grabbed her arm and said.... You're not pretty
you're beautiful. Idon't want to be with you forever. I NEED to be
with you forever. And Iwouldn't cry if you walked away...I'd die...
♥♥ ~~THE END~~ ♥♥.......Isn't that sweet? Tonight at midnight your
true love willrealize they like you. Something good will happen to
you at 1:00-4:00pm tomorrow, it could be anywhere on IM or email,
outside of school,anywhere! Get ready for the biggest shock of your
life. If you breakthis chain letter you will be cursed with 10
relationship problems forthe next ten years. If you post this to 15
pages in 15 minutes, you're safe.
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vampiresballad Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
So true ^^
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Toasted-Muffin Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
Dude life with out sex is a pain in the ass...

which means working for sex is also a pain in the ass 

so why not just mastorbate and lay next to the one we love. when fighting always comes from trying to have sex..my life sucks and i am venting like a mother fucker right now
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AshMashTheFlash Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem shows the power of simplicity and I love it. I've always found it very hard to do and, therefore, appreciate that you have done it so it well.
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GoreyPsychoChick Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Great poem, and GREAT description. I want to wait until I'm married to have sex with someone. I want to know them before I even do such a thing. Sex is something that you can't have with just anybody. It's something very special and it shows that you truely care and love that person. Heck, if I ever get married, like some other people, I'd probably have sex with the person I love on my wedding night. It makes sense, right? But still, great poem. I really enjoyed it and it really gets to me.
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Love4MusicGirl03 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
wow. great poem for that other point of view. this is great
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hoonamity Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
BRAVO<3 omg love love love
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dannyboy1994 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Brava! And I know what you're saying... At least I think I do...
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ace-is-king Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012
HAHAHAHAHA
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ImagineI Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012
Hey- wicked poem : ) I can clearly see your thought process. How did you make the preview for this the text by the way?
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Skylerflight1207 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2012
Wow! that's beautiful. it made me think too.
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msdonnad Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
i like it, the implied meaning, and sarcastic tones. and yes ,the words, they flow well, nice work!
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lexxy96 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
sex is meant to be a special connection between two people. it isnt meant to be a one-night stand, it isnt meant to be only for your own pleasure. it is meant to be an expression of physical love and the revealing of the depth of trust. its meant to be real.
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SilverRose92 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I totally agree with you on this. Sex is supposed to be something beautiful you share with the one you love, but just like everything else that's beautiful in the world, today's society has to screw with it
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TheLibraryShade Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the format and the rhythmic flow of the words.
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Mesmrize Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
good one...!
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Megamindlover666 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011
This was very interesting, I liked it. :)
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WorldOfWonder Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011
I had to re-read this to catch sarcasm as I read it thinking it was meant. I think I understand most of it but I didn't get all of the references. I agree with the vulgarity with which society views sex. I believe it to be a beautiful act of spiritually joining with the one you love (whether people believe it spiritual is up to them, but the love and beauty involved is for any belief or lack of).

I'm not an expert, and take this only as constructive (or not so constructive lol!) criticism: I think it is fairly well written and has a good message disguised in nice words, but it could be improved. Perhaps through rhythm and less obscure references. I know they're not supposed to be obvious - poetry's no fun otherwise - but if the reader can't decifer it then it may not be written quite right.

I like it, anyway. Good work and a great idea! Hopefully, your word will help get through to people. :3
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madibell Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2011  Student General Artist
THRUST THRUST! lmao
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trevormodesto Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010
Interesting perception....
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JessicaFinie Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010
<heyy it`s nice & wonderfull ;)
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metal-steffi Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Love the flow, the vulgarity. Great poem, well done.
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danelstoryteller Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010  Student Writer
love is a feeling, you don't really choice the ones you love
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sacnite Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2010
I love this.
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persephoneisthename Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
I like the flow :)
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happyhappyjoyjoy2-0 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap:

BRILLIANT!
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BioshockMari Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2009
Amazing.
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willowswhisp Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
Gracious, I needed to read something like this. Not to fall into the trap; an act so magical and beautiful turned into sweat and dust, there is nothing to be romanticized in that. Thank you.
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drops1812 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2009
in my opinion I think is so brilliant the poem.Wonderful.:hug:
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theleashedfreak Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2009
Brilliant.
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Snow22 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Your whole idea is quite clear and i agree that sex with true love is really unnessiary.
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singerathevmpire Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2009
dude you should white poams for a liveing your good at them you may have lost your verginity but you have talent impress the girl you love hopefully she will love you in return
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hehpoof Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
I am so sorry you all feel that way o.O Yeah, there are some--and maybe even many--that only want sex for sex, sans relationship or meaning. But sex itself is not inherently bad. I personally enjoy a two-year-and-still-going relationship, sex included. If it were only about the sex, the novelty would be long gone and we would certainly have other partners by now. I also personally know other couples who are also in long-term relationships, sex included.

Some people think that ideally, sex would be about love or something deeper or whatever. I think it depends greatly on one's own religion and values, but in my opinion sex for sex's sake is not a bad thing either. There are times when raw animal sex appeals much more than any touch-feely sex, and you CAN have both with the same person--I do it all the time. I don't even really understand the big taboo with sexual flings, as long as one is being physically and emotionally safe.

One more thing: the term, "making love"? It's a creepy label to put on sex. Just thought I'd throw that out there ^_^

I do think the poem shows a very real aspect of sex, and the artist's comments hold a great deal of truth as well. But there is a -whole- other side to the story; if one were to choose to ignore it, one would be choosing to forgo one of the more basic and wonderful activities in life.
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cheng-wi Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2008   Writer
Your comment on your poem is what really got me. I've had sex, and it's not what it seems. I was tempted until I could take no more, so I gave in. They wanted me for my looks, not who I was inside. They took the thing that I held dear, my virginity. Now I have nothing. They took what they wanted, and when they were done, the threw me away, to rot. So now I have nothing. I've lost the only thing that meant anything. Now no one wants me and I'm all alone. I'm waiting for someone to come take me home. To hold me, and love me for who I really am. But until then..... I'm left in the darkness. Alone.
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FinalFallenFantasy Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010
*Hugs* I know it's been nearly two years since you posted this comment, but I just thought you sounded like you needed a hug. :hug: :cuddle:
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cheng-wi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010   Writer
aww:) thanks
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GemChameleon Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2008
Dude, whenever someone writes a poem about sex it just makes them look perverted. But you kind of make it a beautiful thing instead of some dirty hanky panky in the back seat of a car. Which is good.

Awesome job; wish I could be as literate as you but I have the attention span of a squirrel with ADD.
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puwen Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2007
actually, I think this poem is fascinating. Whilst most people associate sex with love, or a consumation of that, you speak of it as a trap, like a spider's web. You also cover the confusion that sex causes people to feel; does this mean something more.

A fav from me. xx
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StarrLion Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2007
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Awesome job!!!!!!!!!!

Love is choice. Not a feeling. Sex only will not hold a couple together. No foundation at all to stand on when trouble comes.

And it will come!!

The main reason for not having sex before getting married. So you can build something together.

>^..^<
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